Sunday afternoons at 20 Maresfield Gardens

By TropicalSnowstorm

Not everything
is sexual.

Sometimes


a lion is just hungry.
Without trace of
Oedipal
motive it licks bones.
 
You scream  


it yawns. 


-- by TropicalSnowstorm, 18 March 2015


**Structured poetry in the new Lupus Teleform 
 

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Copyright 2015 TropicalSnowstorm
Published on Thursday, March 19, 2015.     Filed under: "Philosophical" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

For a good time call +44 20 7435 2002. (This was written for the 'Dial “1” for poetry contest'.)

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  • MercyRain On Sunday, June 28, 2015, MercyRain (116)By person wrote:

    yes, maybe just maybe the lion was more interested in that yummy marrow inside the boner than the girl screaming....

  • MercyRain On Sunday, June 28, 2015, MercyRain (116)By person wrote:

    dunno why i said girl, maybe leftover from just finishing watching Cabin Fever a few minutes ago...

  • A former member wrote: Loved the poem the meaning runs deep but the style that was developed by lupus I want to check out.

  • Arch and Breezeblock On Friday, April 3, 2015, Arch and Breezeblock (83)By person wrote:

    very nice....sometimes a cigar is just a cigar... ;) masterful use of the style, congrats!

  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, March 31, 2015, carlosjackal (1971)By person wrote:

    I love the humour in these lines. A more than worthy winner.

  • lupus tenebrae On Monday, March 30, 2015, lupus tenebrae (1020)By person wrote:

    I was excited at the mere prospect of having you enter this contest, because I knew the end result would be something worth waiting for. Summer's piece was amazing in its own right, but yours was the closest to what I had in mind. You took this foreign (sometimes irritating) style of mine and made it your own, I expected no less. To be honest, I knew from the start that there wouldn't be many entrants, but to see that my contest had yielded the artistry that it did more than makes up for my previous disappointment. So, congratulations, you've certainly earned the accolades. Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, March 31, 2015, TropicalSnowstorm (1697)By person wrote:

    You developed a very cool style, as you say, with "endless possibilities". I love it! The Lupus Teleform will definitely be revisited. : ) Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • DerSturmKommt On Wednesday, March 18, 2015, DerSturmKommt (109)By person wrote:

    Incredibly clever! Every word here was chosen with care. The title is impressive & ties perfectly with the heart of the work. Love the animalistic qualities used to illustrate primal instinct. Very provocative; the punctuation compliments the precision of your syntax. 10!

  • Star On Wednesday, March 18, 2015, Star (1306)By person wrote:

    I can smell flowers in the distance. Lovely piece.

  • A former member wrote: i absolutely love the unabashed and unapologetic carnality of this. all ego removed. stunning piece.

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