Romeo Took a Lover

By TropicalSnowstorm

she wrote her name on my
heart with a dry erase marker
needing to leave some trace
but not one that would last

loneliness makes eyes sparkle
and it's possible to make love
to the same woman for years
even if they have different faces

no need to push her away as each
time she leaves on her own with
her heart locked safely away from
any chance of pain or real intimacy

one day i'm afraid she'll try to take
it out of the box and find it's turned
to dust in her absence but caring too
much seems to be against the rules

in the end it's all about not being
alone yet i hold to the hope there's
more someday because i'm tired of
hanging Picasso's on bathroom walls


-- by Steve McKennon
3/29/04

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Copyright 2004 TropicalSnowstorm
Published on Tuesday, March 30, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Mighty Mouse On Tuesday, August 10, 2010, Mighty Mouse (74)By person wrote:

    This is beautiful

  • blue On Tuesday, October 27, 2009, blue (1470)By person wrote:

    mmm... I shall refrain from commentary and quietly, begrudgingly agree. Tips hat. ~b

  • A former member wrote: pilfering emotions in a pick pocket fashion,... by the time you wake...its all but over with nothing more than a hand full of skeleton wishes,...its not that they were all redundant,...its just we failed to put flesh on the bones we wished upon....excellent piece that deserves another run.

  • Sin On Saturday, July 1, 2006, Sin (1190)By person wrote:

    this was precise..and cut to the quick internal honesty..the whole write was superb but the 2nd and 4th stanzas especially struck me ~kristy

  • A former member wrote: Jeeeeeeez.....Goddamn are you GOOD.

  • GirlintheBox On Friday, August 6, 2004, GirlintheBox (42)By person wrote:

    i love the first stanza....great poem *krystal*

  • liquid_emotion On Friday, July 23, 2004, liquid_emotion (356)By person wrote:

    maybe thats exacty where it belongs.

  • shortandpretentious On Friday, July 23, 2004, shortandpretentious (9)By person wrote:

    i love how you end each line in the middle of a clause, it gives the poem a dizzy, stumbling feeling.

  • Delphoid-Q On Thursday, June 24, 2004, Delphoid-Q (217)By person wrote:

    'it's possible to make love to the same woman for years even if they have different faces' Oh, inspiration! As always, your style leaves me awed.

  • CharlottesWeb On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, CharlottesWeb (521)By person wrote:

    This has that long faced sadness of a grey day harboring a slight wind...the kind you've seen your self in a hundred times, but never actualy expereinced. I loved this...your writting has a power and a..a...grace to it.

  • worm On Saturday, April 10, 2004, worm (1436)By person wrote:

    ah...T/S, you have a way of striking the deep nerve! I know that I've been through this very thing time and time again... but then, I AM an old fart!

  • worm On Saturday, April 10, 2004, worm (1436)By person wrote:

    and Picasso, I think, needs a better view! love it! worm...

  • Cinn On Thursday, April 8, 2004, Cinn (158)By person wrote:

    i love this peice its sad and being so truthful its even more sad but its so good

  • Ophelia On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, Ophelia (228)By person wrote:

    left wanting more but taking what you can get, the metaphors were as every one has said wonderful, , , O.

  • Loomer On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, Loomer (11)By person wrote:

    This piece is so incredibly well written. Just the line "loneliness makes eyes sparkle" struck me. I enjoy your work greatly. ~Loomer~

  • purr_verse On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, purr_verse (1037)By person wrote:

    yes, this is beautifully poignant indeed, with aching descriptives and marvellous, deepsubtle and clever metaphor. great work.

  • KittyStryker On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, KittyStryker (736)By person wrote:

    oh, beautiful... so sad, so lonesome... resigned was a good word to put to it. brilliantly done.

  • capt_funguy On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, capt_funguy (807)By person wrote:

    i find your views/insights/ whatevers ... on on relationships , and loneliness , to be very interesting ... sort of forever hopeful with a sprinkle of already resigned .... very cool man ... funguy

  • Johny_D_Lewis On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis (507)By person wrote:

    well done same woman different face, well done

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, OLd SouL (769)By person wrote:

    yeah, I have to agree with ff. 'making love to the same woman for years even if they have diff faces' really stuck with me. Because it can be so true. Your pen is driven by a powerful mind which I truly appreciate. :::OLd

  • sulkylime On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, sulkylime (203)By person wrote:

    i really enjoyed all your twisted warped expressions.. and the way you structured it is great. kept me entranced.. --

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, flying_fox (597)By person wrote:

    the Picasso/bathroom metaphor is superb... I had to think twice about it. I also love "it’s possible to make love to the same woman for years even if they have different faces"... this is an amazing poem. Fox

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