I Never Could Breathe Alone...

By BleedSilver

i sway...
to my feet
weighed down
by my

a weight
than the pained
look on your face...
the death-littered
of an already
and the rush
of these feelings
suddenly coming back
drag me
the surface

and i can't breathe...
i never could breathe alone...

i need the
of being secure
in your arms again.
i always failed
to realize
what open arms
meant to me...
and now i feel the loss.
it hurts,
it hurts.

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Copyright 2004 Mike Duffy
Published on Monday, October 18, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: god, this describes my life right now...everyone's gone and there's no one to talk to..it's hard...i spend a good part of the day on the brink of having a meltdown...awesome poem, absolutely brilliant

  • Sticky Kitty On Thursday, March 24, 2005, Sticky Kitty (253)By person wrote:

    oh how I know your pain -kitty

  • Angst Queen On Friday, November 12, 2004, Angst Queen (372)By person wrote:

    This could make the strongest person cry. Amazing

  • NikesRain On Thursday, November 4, 2004, NikesRain (1340)By person wrote:

    damn....still can't get through this with dry eyes. *sigh* forceful with kid gloves.

  • BleedSilver On Thursday, November 4, 2004, BleedSilver (300)By person wrote:

    sorry to make you cry...-hugs-

  • A former member wrote: very powerful write indeed, strikes to the core. well done indeed.

  • A former member wrote: This is breathtakingly divine. So beautiful that I feel I may suffocate in it's presence. This wrenched my heart like no other poem I have read, and yet you have used so few words. Magnificent. ~*~ Rose ~*~

  • Johny_D_Lewis On Wednesday, October 20, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis (507)By person wrote:

    Its beautiful and heart breaking. *hugs tight* Its very hard to breath alone, very good wording..you got the feeling pefectly of how it feels to be without someone.

  • elisa On Wednesday, October 20, 2004, elisa (1648)By person wrote:

    such a moment of clarity....absolutely beautiful~elisa

  • K_Love On Monday, October 18, 2004, K_Love (531)By person wrote:

    I agree with NikesPleasure.. I'm speechless also, no words to say this left me utterly breathless. Wonderful write. ~Kirsten~

  • NikesRain On Monday, October 18, 2004, NikesRain (1340)By person wrote:

    ..*speechless*....beautiful and heartwrenching.....thank you..*goes for tissues*. Great write.

  • Zhee On Monday, October 18, 2004, Zhee (539)By person wrote:

    this was wonderful work... painful and true...

  • DarkDruidess On Monday, October 18, 2004, DarkDruidess (361)By person wrote:

    Painful to read because I could never breath alone either...nice work...

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