Love's Vespine Allegory

By purr_verse

I'd never seen another quite like you -
beautiful unfamiliar creature
in your sixlegged frenzied grasstop crawl,
sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms
from the back of your glorious
chitinous wingmarvels
painted wild iridescent blues, greens, violets;
In my wondercaught crouch before you
I rest my hand upon the ground
so that you may crawl across me
and I can feel your tickling motion,
bringing me closer to an alien delight
and the curious gentle pleasure
of meeting something new
and enriching.

My neighbour steps outside a moment,
notices us.
Since I do not know your name,
I ask if
perhaps
he does.

"It's a native wasp," he tells me,

and in that reflexive, cruel instant,
with a flick and a twitch
and a fearsharpened deliberate motion
fuelled by memory of past pains,
i crush you

before you can hurt me.

---

Oh, but I did not forget you -
you were so very beautiful -
and later


too much later


I learnt that the magical little Blue Flower Wasp
does not sting.

---

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Copyright 2005 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Thursday, February 10, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Riven Waker On Sunday, October 10, 2010, Riven Waker (340)By person wrote:

    incredibly tragic and beautiful

  • Scarrzz On Tuesday, July 21, 2009, Scarrzz (249)By person wrote:

    Very well done. Truly outstanding. Impeccable timing, with vibrant descriptions, but the kicker is how it left me feeling. Grief over a lost chance at something truly beautiful. * * * I shall have to read more of yours. Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, September 21, 2008, TropicalSnowstorm (1731)By person wrote:

    Beautiful piece! Don't know how I missed this one previously... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: oh shoot!!! this hurts.. Scholar

  • zanewill On Sunday, January 28, 2007, zanewill (84)By person wrote:

    WOW!! and what an allegory it is!! Absolutely stunning imagery & perfectly timed!! Write on!!***

  • A former member wrote: by far the greatest allegory i have ever read. so much detail and meaning. i love it all..."i crush you before you can hurt me" priceless

  • Anth On Monday, May 16, 2005, Anth (1144)By person wrote:

    in my wondercaught crouch before you, returning to this again today that line jumps out at me the most, this work, forever splendid, a classic

  • stuart_pid On Monday, May 9, 2005, stuart_pid (137)By person wrote:

    wonderfully worded and so relevant to life. quite possibly one of the most creative pieces i have ever read.

  • A former member wrote: Regret is such a secret human emotion. we feel it more than we see it in others as it is a weakness. A weakness of failure. However you expressed it in such an honest an beautiful way. This was great!

  • A former member wrote: awwwwww - wow it's so nice to hear something of such different nature - Yet man! This relates to so much in the real world - I don't even have to spell out what. So beautiful - Soooooo much images pouring out. I had to slow down while i was reading it

  • NikesRain On Tuesday, April 12, 2005, NikesRain (1340)By person wrote:

    shining imagery and a lovely whimsical feel in this, and the ending just provokes your mind to skip from reverie into more serious contemplation. ahh that fear can over ride such a light moment..wonderful

  • SilentStalker On Monday, March 14, 2005, SilentStalker (1095)By person wrote:

    ...not too many things amaze me quite like this did; I think I'm at a loss for words... Scholar

  • stormtalk On Sunday, March 13, 2005, stormtalk (736)By person wrote:

    MURDERESS!

  • island warrior On Friday, March 11, 2005, island warrior (216)By person wrote:

    A very enjoyable read, "In my wondercaught crouch before you" I love that line.

  • jaunty pill On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill (47)By person wrote:

    An ending that rocks the reader into an almost twisted silence. This poems contains some of the most creative words I've ever seen used in a piece. This is reflective and hauntingly. Welcome to my bookmarks. I can't wait to read more.

  • Loneal On Thursday, March 3, 2005, Loneal (86)By person wrote:

    I am humbled by how you can turn regret into something as beautiful as this ... ~L

  • urbanhumility On Tuesday, February 22, 2005, urbanhumility (1213)By person wrote:

    so much can be imbued here......simply wise and intelligent.......flawless one might say..............urban

  • Solace On Monday, February 21, 2005, Solace (1072)By person wrote:

    *smiles* now that, that was a most beautiful allegory and one that i am thankful for reading...truly few can ever create something so awe inspiring and understandable...but you have done it with eloquence...wunderbar!

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Monday, February 21, 2005, Spiritus_Frumenti (345)By person wrote:

    that wasn't very nice...lol..poor wasp...-l-

  • Carmina Gitana On Friday, February 18, 2005, Carmina Gitana (161)By person wrote:

    God this is good. I love the slow, languid pace of the beginning, the suddenness of the denouement and the shift back to slowness and regret. Beautifully done.

  • Delilah On Wednesday, February 16, 2005, Delilah (115)By person wrote:

    Completely awesome work, great twist, I didn't see it coming...~Delilah~

  • A former member wrote: creepy crawlies give me the creepy crawlies . . . seriously though a very eloquent and relaxing read

  • Trail of Fiends On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, Trail of Fiends (37)By person wrote:

    quite a master-piece you have here. Like the twist. "sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms". wonderful.

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, flying_fox (597)By person wrote:

    oh natty... this just makes me cry. I was very moved by "and in that reflexive, cruel instant".. perhaps not the most melodious line in the piece, but the one which rang truest to me. Terrific title.

  • A former member wrote: "sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms" Splen(purr)id, in the likeness of DH Lawrence. I luv the color/texture which tickles motion like an 'alien delight'. "chitinous wingmarvels" This Scolia soror; such a sadly , yet beautiful moment. Feels like a pain

  • A former member wrote: ...ting! well splashed (no susurrant pun). Well done, 'with a flick and a twitch.' Brightly iridescent...you are a talent.

  • A former member wrote: Each one of your writes that I read reminds me of an excerpt from a glorious adventure tale. Hmm maybe it's just me, either way I love _every_ minute of each. Wonderful work:) ~Ryan

  • A former member wrote: such sweet simplicity and such perfectly written beauty, Truly gorgeous writing

  • Anth On Friday, February 11, 2005, Anth (1144)By person wrote:

    utterly perfect, in every way, written as only you could, another of your poems that i find ill be able to know off by heart, so many things shine through this

  • Lotophagi On Friday, February 11, 2005, Lotophagi (341)By person wrote:

    awww, that's so beautiful, and sad..... the most amazing imagery, the opening stanza is delicious, moorish, but oh, then it hurts - I felt like a child instinctively acting and then the remorse..... oh you paint a brilliant masterpiece. Thank you.

  • birdwell On Friday, February 11, 2005, birdwell (139)By person wrote:

    that has to be the most radical roller-coaster i've ever been on; super high, crushing low, and then a hurling twist, your amazing ~db~

  • Sepulcrawl On Friday, February 11, 2005, Sepulcrawl (78)By person wrote:

    You've really outdone yourself.

  • capt_funguy On Friday, February 11, 2005, capt_funguy (807)By person wrote:

    so sad ... the temp pain of a stinger seems preferable to the lasting pain mistakes like this bring ... just a beautiful piece , a simplest tragedy... funguy

  • A former member wrote: A beautiful tragedy; spoken as only you know how: through the eyes of innocence shaded by demise. Thank you for this prismatic view. :)

  • A former member wrote: It's great to have a new work from you. I love this. Poignant and eloquently expressed.

  • A former member wrote: A fantastic allegory of trust, it's too smart!

  • BoldSolitude On Thursday, February 10, 2005, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    I loved the choice of words "fearsharpened deliberate motion" followed by "fuelled by memory of past pains, i crush you" It beautifully depicts a primal imbedded reaction that results in a deliberate injury, that in hindsight was unnecessary.

  • BoldSolitude On Thursday, February 10, 2005, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    we all fear falling prey, thus we inadvertantly become the destroyer of

  • Lynaes On Thursday, February 10, 2005, Lynaes (879)By person wrote:

    "and a fearsharpened deliberate motion fuelled by memory of past pains, i crush you before you can hurt me" I love that part.. I love all of it.

  • Lynaes On Thursday, February 10, 2005, Lynaes (879)By person wrote:

    Beautifully unique and captivating purr, and I agree with ardnek. I love the way you express yourself through writing.. so much wisdom goes into your words. Very nicely done. :)

  • ardneK On Thursday, February 10, 2005, ardneK (73)By person wrote:

    ouch, I like the underlying meaning behind this, nicely done - >|


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