the break-up

By KittyStryker

“i'm sorry”
you said


at all.

i saw it coming.

you took
her leaving you
out on me
as if conquering
my body
would bring her back.

and when
it didn't
you left me

you know

i think
i'd miss you

if i had seen you

to have something

to miss.

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© 2006 Bast
Published on Saturday, January 28, 2006.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Damn. This is deep and blunt. Love it.

  • ChinaEcho On Tuesday, March 27, 2012, ChinaEcho (9)By person wrote:

    When you are down to nothing, remember that you really have the power to make something out of nothing.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1715)By person wrote:

    "you took her leaving you out on me" - that line speaks volumes. Where are you? I miss reading your stuff and hope you are well. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • KittyStryker On Saturday, February 3, 2007, KittyStryker (736)By person wrote:

    I'm around, just not posting- no money to write. :/

  • urbanhumility On Friday, October 20, 2006, urbanhumility (1213)By person wrote:

    proper in all aspects of the heart..........well spoken......urban

  • flying_fox On Thursday, March 30, 2006, flying_fox (597)By person wrote:

    Love the last stanza... it evokes a cool detachment with just the right amount of venom. I'm so sorry for your pain...

  • A former member wrote: is this true? Are you broken up? You are a hot babe and will real them in all the time. Plenty of fish in the ponds.

  • KittyStryker On Thursday, March 2, 2006, KittyStryker (736)By person wrote:

    yup. Jared and I broke up. Well, I broke up with him. Oh well. And what's lame is- he said he was sorry, he was looking for a masochist? Who does he sleep with? A Dominant chick who hates pain. :/ So it goes...

  • Invader Lyn On Thursday, February 23, 2006, Invader Lyn (50)By person wrote:

    Very nice. Lots of people aren't worth the pain of a breakup. You've captured that nicely.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Thursday, February 2, 2006, TropicalSnowstorm (1715)By person wrote:

    "if I had seen you enough to have something to miss" - great ending to this one. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • darkdesires On Saturday, January 28, 2006, darkdesires (145)By person wrote:

    Its far too comon for someone to simply use something has a replacement. People using other people in such a manner is deplorable, but it makes me chuckle seeing has it doesn't even phase you.

  • A former member wrote: *frowns* be turned to in order to take away someone's pain of losing's enough to make one realize what they do or don't want from love. *Evangel*

  • LovelyAssassinx On Saturday, January 28, 2006, LovelyAssassinx (153)By person wrote:

    I think this is probably the first poem on here that I've found...that I can 100% relate too. This is exactly how I feel about one of my ex's.

  • elisa On Saturday, January 28, 2006, elisa (1648)By person wrote:

    try as we will to disconnect.....there is something very personal about throwing ourselves on the alter of sacrifice.......if only our discarded carcass reaped the benefits of the spiritual blessing

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