cosmic ditty (how i get the girls)

By jack paper

the scene: a bar, or anyplace a boy meets girl

(me: let me see if i can impress her)
(her: oh god, not another one)
(me: here goes... clears throat)

in the cosmic mix
in the heavens
your star was fixed

(me: i bet she's diggin this)
(her: ~yawn~)

shone its light
for me

(me: good, good)
(her: is he gonna
buy me a beer?)



could it be?

(her: blinks)

the star was put there
just to see?

(me: i think i'm in)

are my light
my shining star

(her: trite)

becon to me
from afar

(her: passe
are you from hallmark?)

when i first saw
the light i knew

(me: she's hooked)

strong and perfect
bright and true

(me: she's mine!)

could only come
from such
as you

(me: score!)

(her: bleh)

wait baby! come back!
i'll do one about your tatoos!
(me: hmmm, what rhymes with "brutus"?)

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© 2007 chthonian
Published on Tuesday, January 30, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • scarletara On Saturday, February 6, 2010, scarletara (61)By person wrote:

    funny, funny...

  • A former member wrote: Ha! this was very funny. And too true. Man I wish pick up lines worked..

  • A former member wrote: heh. That was sheer brilliance. Absolute comedic truth.

  • A former member wrote: uhhh..ludus?

  • Mari On Tuesday, March 6, 2007, Mari (432)By person wrote:

    hah, thats cute

  • torn_beauty On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, torn_beauty (81)By person wrote:

    ha! that was great! made me laugh at the end. im think i need to fav this!

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1718)By person wrote:

    Hell yeah! Love this one! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, February 2, 2007, Bella Butchery (747)By person wrote:

    ahhhhh the girls with the tatoos... i too have a weak spot for those my brother. supreme

  • Tania On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Tania (203)By person wrote:

    comical...very good!

  • BeautifullyRuined On Tuesday, January 30, 2007, BeautifullyRuined (94)By person wrote:

    That is so adorable.I like it.

  • Dei On Tuesday, January 30, 2007, Dei (709)By person wrote:

    this was cute.

  • Sin On Tuesday, January 30, 2007, Sin (1191)By person wrote:

    lol this made me time try..hey baby, nice shoes wanna fuck?

  • jack paper On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, jack paper (129)By person wrote:

    rofl.. nice shoes...does that work?

  • Sin On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Sin (1191)By person wrote:

    yes lol..and if nothing else it makes them laugh ;)

  • Mylissa On Tuesday, January 30, 2007, Mylissa (889)By person wrote:

    Oh my gosh...this is brilliant. I love it. there is such a comedic approach to this, yet oh so true. Great job.

  • Mylissa On Tuesday, January 30, 2007, Mylissa (889)By person wrote:

    and yes I really said "oh my gosh" lol. Sheesh I am such a nerd at times. ;)

  • jack paper On Thursday, February 15, 2007, jack paper (129)By person wrote:

    sheesh! you've revealed your true self! o my gosh! lol

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